I did not like this story as much as I thought I was going to. First of all, the plot and story line are all wrong. The author decided to focus on the least important thing to develop the story. Second, the language of the book, the way the author wrote the characters was awful. I don’t know how old she is, but I don’t think she’s young enough to understand teen’s lingo these days. The way she wrote this story made it seem like she has two teenage children and she overheard them talk and then copied their conversation into the pages. I’m not even joking, some of the conversation between characters are so bad, that they made me cringe, and not in a good way.
She also writes without sentiment, which can be a good thing or a bad thing. But in this case, it felt like a bad thing. When you read her books, she doesn’t compare the characters emotion with anything. When she’s having the characters talk to each other, you don’t feel like their genuine because she focuses more on the physical part of the conversation instead of the emotional. When I’m reading a book, I want to make sure I feel what the character is saying and thinking. It’s a book, it’s supposed to make me feel their emotions. I don’t want to know that someone turns barely to the side, and she was talking. If I wanted that I would watch a movie.
Don’t get me wrong, I don’t think is bad that she went this route with her book, and I know some of you even appreciate it because she doesn’t get as poetical as the other authors. But when you read this book, you learn to appreciate the second-hand opinion that characters when describing things, people, or feelings–because you have a base of comparison, and as readers, it helps us a lot to understand what the character is going through.
I felt like there were so many things that she could have addressed in this, and others that honestly, she did not need to mention. Like, for example, Erin did not fully develop the actual emotions that Vaughn could have been feeling towards her parents. She could have gotten more into depth for that aspect. Also, she could have addressed Oakley’s relationship with his parents a little bit better. Oak has a strained relationship with his parents but it was also a great point to focus on for part of the story, instead of him going to stupid clubs for stupid reasons. Like, that was not as important as to solve his parents’ mystery.
The story itself had a lot of potentials, and if she would have gotten a different route with her plot twist, the book could have been way better. Something else that I didn’t like was how stupid the plot line was, I don’t want to give anything away, but I felt like there were more things that she could have made their “breaking point.” And she should have brought that plot twist part, (you know, the part where-everything-goes-wrong-before-it-gets-right part), sooner. She literally did it at the end, and not the middle end, but like a few pages from the end, giving us little to no space to wonder for the what if, or even the epilogue.